The feedback from my workshop group was very helpful in giving me advise on how to expand on certain aspects of my writing and making small corrections when needed. Specifically, I was asked to expand on certain descriptions of the place to emphasize the experience. I was asked to write more on a topic that I mentioned in order to create a new point in the paper.
Both of the student reviews gave me insights on how I could improve my paper and add length. Mason pointed out that I should talk more about the recent fad in healthy eating and how that contributes to the space and the targeted audience. He also gave me some organizational advise. Tara suggested specific changes and also that I expand on certain descriptions of the space and to clarify certain things.
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